Ok, I am SOOO in the spirit that I wrote ANOTHER entry for Susanna Leonard Hill's
THE 7TH ANNUAL HALLOWEENSIE CONTEST!!!!!
~ FOR CHILDREN’S WRITERS ~
I am not usually a writer of rhyme, but this seemed like the perfect place to give it a try (and Halloween seems to call for scary atmosphere or silly rhymes!) A huge THANK YOU to my writer friend and rhyme-guru Nancy Tandon https://nancytandon.com/ for helping me in record time! I still can't believe I got it down to 88 contest words - just goes to show that you can ALWAYS cut more...
ONE HUNGRY MONSTER
Treat bag in hand, this
monster was dressed,
Trick-or-treating was
finally in sight.
But my tummy rumbled, my
monster guts grumbled,
I asked mom “what’s for
dinner tonight?”
She said, “Candy for
dinner!” What could be better?
I danced down the shadowy
streets.
I ate sour things, gooey things,
candy corn chewy things,
My insides filled up with
sweets.
When we got home, I counted
my loot,
With a belly that rumbled
and hurt.
I shed monster fur, pulled
off my mask
And asked Mom, “Hey, what’s
for dessert?”
LOL, for someone who doesn't usually write in rhyme, you did a bang up job! Good luck in the contest!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jilanne, you too!
DeleteYUM! Candy for dinner! What a lovely thought! And fun rhythm, too! :) Best wishes in the contest!
ReplyDeleteThank you Rene, my friend and I actually tried dessert for dinner once but it backfired!
DeleteThis is so my kids!
ReplyDeleteMine too!
DeleteDessert first AND second. Now that's a good meal. Good work.
ReplyDeleteThanks David!
DeleteThere's never enough candy-so kid relatable-love it. Good luck :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Charlotte, you too!
DeleteAnd I'm eating an ice cream pop right now, Eileen! I love your mc's mindset...candy, candy, and more candy. What fun! Well done!
ReplyDeletethank you Vivian! These contests are a hoot
DeleteHey thanks for making me an 'internet official' rhyme guru -- I'll add that to my query letters. ;)
ReplyDeleteI love the Hallowensie for the playful fun & practice it encourages.
I ♥️ the ending !
Where's your entry?!
DeleteHa! Isn't that always the case? I hardly think of time not appropriate for chocolate. :-) Good Luck.
ReplyDeleteThank you, and I agree ;)
DeleteI agree with McMarshall, wash down all that candy with some chocolate. =) Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Love yours!
DeleteGood job and a fun read!
ReplyDeleteThank you Sherri!
DeleteGreat rhyme! I bet my kids would ask for dessert after trick or treating too.
ReplyDeleteRight? Wish I could still eat like that!
DeleteGreat fun and nice job on the rhyme. I don't rhyme either, but it's almost a given w/so few words.
ReplyDeleteRight Kathy?! I was so proud b/c I even had to cut a whole 'stanza'? to get under the 100 and I think it still made sense! Good luck!
Deleteomg...sugar overload! what a silly monster.
ReplyDeleteNice job with the rhyme. I agree, Halloween screams for rhyming themes.
best of luck :)
Thanks Vicki - it was really fun attempting rhyme!
DeleteI am sure lots of kids can relate to that tonight! Great job!
ReplyDeleteThanks Nicholissa! I'll look for yours ;)
Deleteoh, my tummy hurts just thinking of all that sugar! A kid's dream come true!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jane, good luck to you! There are so many entries that I can't find everyone anymore to comment!
DeleteNicely done, Eileen! Great job for a not-usually-a-rhymer :) and cute story - so kid-true! Love that after all that candy your MC asks for dessert! :)
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